Document: draft-ietf-softwire-mesh-framework-05.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-12-15 IETF LC End Date: 2008-12-15 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Almost Ready Comments: the document is very unpleasant to read and have some editorial nits: - page 1: too many authors (proposal: keep editor(s) and add a section with the full list of authors. It is a common problem so the solution should be well known) - Abstract page 2: too long - Abstract page 2: the position of softwire mesh vs general overlay is not explained (but as the Abstract is already too long...) - 3.1 page 8: figure 1 has some nits (just fix them or warn the RFC editor) - 3.2 page 10: same for figure 2 with more nits - 5 page 13: in the E-IP family, and -> in the E-IP family, (i.e., keep only the last "and") - 5 page 14: i.e. -> i.e., - 7 page 16: core, send the packet -> core, then send the packet - 10.1 page 18: the [RFC4378] -> [RFC4378] - 10.1 page 19: trade offs -> trade-offs ? - 10.1 page 19: verses -> versus - 11.1 page 20: unbounded -> unbound ? - 11.2 page 23: Lan-Like -> LAN-Like (or LAN-like) - 14.1 page 24: playback -> replay - 14.3 page 28: (the only technical issue) there is no more a "main mode" in IKEv2. BTW the text seems to mandate preshared keys when IMHO it requires only automatical SA establishment (better than key distribution). - Authors' page 30: too many authors