Document: draft-cdmi-mediatypes-02 Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: 5 December 2010 IETF LC End Date: 2010-12-09 IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: The document looks pretty good overall, but there are some edits that are recommended below. The Acknowledgements section should get moved to a later section in the document. Major issues: Minor issues: Section 5: Recommend moving the Acknowledgements section to the end of the document. The current placement makes it feel like the document is complete when sections like security are still later in the document. Nits/editorial comments: Section 1, sentence two: Recommend adding a comma: From: As part of this interface the To: As part of this interface, the Section 2, first sentence: I don't think the word definitely is necessary as you are defining the storage cloud as being across a network. From: A storage cloud is a storage service hosted either on-premise or off- premise, definitely across a network. To: A storage cloud is a storage service hosted either on-premise or off- premise across a network. Section 2, Second sentence: Change "is" to "are" - referring to resources which are plural. From: An important part of the cloud model, in general, is the concept of a pool of resources that is drawn from, on demand, in small increments (smaller than what one would typically purchase by buying equipment). To: An important part of the cloud model, in general, is the concept of a pool of resources that are drawn from, on demand, in small increments (smaller than what one would typically purchase by buying equipment). Section 2, third paragraph, second sentence: Consider rewording this sentence, I am not sure what the second part of it is trying to convey. " In addition, data system metadata can be set on containers and their contained data elements through this interface." Section 3, first sentence: Recommend changing From: In this section we summarize the processing of each media type. To: This section summarizes the processing of each media type. second sentence: From: In this document we provide only the essential information. To: This document provides only the essential information. Section 3.3 Add a period at the end of the last sentence. Section 3.5 Add a period at the end of the last sentence. Section 7 Add a period at the end of the last sentence. Section 7.1 Add a period at the end of the last sentence. Section 7.2 Add a period at the end of the last sentence. Change the last sentence From: These are described fully i section 16.1 of the CDMI specification To: These are described fully in section 16.1 of the CDMI specification.