Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-framework-10.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2010-03-05
IETF LC End Date: 2010-03-10
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Almost Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: the Terminology is incomplete (no PSAP for instance)
and the GPS stuff seems a bit USA centric (IMHO you should show
the document to a GPS (or Galileo :-) expert).

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 3: add USA to National (if the NENA is a USA organization :-)

 - 1 page 3: I'd *really* like to get an entry for PSAP here!

 - 1 page 3: IMHO there should be an entry for LoST too.

 - 1 page 4: RoutinglLocation -> Routing Location

 - 2 page 5: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 2 page 5: expand EV-DO?

 - 3 page 10: AliceE -> Alice

 - 3 page 10: missing [M7] and [M8]

 - 3 page 10: floating "Figure 2" without a figure (from the .txt version)

 - 3 page 10 (in ESRP entry): sip -> SIP

 - 3 page 10: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 6 page 15: I don't know the quality of GPS in mobile phone, I have
  a GPS receiver for pedestrian (surely best conditions: open-sky,
  low speed), its accuracy is between 4 and 15 m (displayed) and
  <10m at 95% (vendor specs in peace time) without WAAS (I use it
  in France) so your numbers are a bit conservative.

 - 6.1 page 16: WGS 84 could (should :-) be replaced by another
  system and as far as I know it is not the system used in Europe
  (I don't know for ASIA).

 - 6.2 page 17: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 6.5 page 20: requestor -> requester?

 - 6.8 page 23: UAC -> UA (typo? if not the abbrev should be expanded)

 - 6.10 page 25: United States -> United States of America
  (yes, there are more than one United States :-)

 - 7 page 26: IMHO you should add a reference for LoST

 - 8 page 27: AP -> access point

 - 9.1 page 28: xref problem (missing '<' in XML?)

 - 9.1 page 28: IPSEC -> IPsec

 - 10 page 30: please define AoR abbrev at its first use.

 - 12 page 30: i.e -> i.e.,

 - 15 page 31: some missing text before "includes a description"

 - 18 page 32: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - Authors' Addresses pages 36 and 37: US -> USA