Document: draft-ietf-hokey-preauth-ps-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2009/10/29
IETF LC End Date: 2009/10/21
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - Abstract page 2: Extensible Authentication Protocol -> ... (EAP)

 - Introduction page 4: authentication and authorization -> plural
  (this -> these, requires -> require)

 - 3.3.1 page 8: two forms:. ... -> two forms: horizontal and vertical.
  (or: Horizontal and Vertical.)

 - 5 page 10: portion -> part?

 - 5 page 10: there is no b in 2: 2(b) -> 2?

 - 6 page 11: L2 -> layer 2 (or IMHO better link layer).
  I suggest to keep L2 and co to figure and to expend them in the text.

 - 6.1 page 13 and 6.2 page 14: the same

 - 13.1 RFC 4962 is a BCP and is in the normative references?
  (just a question, I believe you've checked it is allowed).

 - 13.2 pages 19 and 20: some spurious spaces before commas.

 - 13.2 page 19: bad cut in URLs (<\nhttp or <htt\np...)

 - Authors' Addresses page 20:
  * +1 (732) 699-5365 -> +1 732 699-5365
  * US -> USA
  I expected China in place of PRC but you should know the official name
  of your own country far better than me (:-).