Draft: draft-ietf-kitten-rfc2853bis-05.txt
Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo <Gonzalo.Camarillo@ericsson.com> 
Review Date: 02 June 2009
IESG Telechat Date: 04 June 2009


Summary:

This draft is ready for publication as a PS RFC.


Comments:

In general, Abstracts should not contain references. While referencing RFC 2853 to explain that this document obsoletes it is probably OK, I would remove the rest of the references from the Abstract.

The naming of the references is not consistent. Some of them are named [RFCxxxx] but not all of them.

In Section 4, a ':' to introduce the definition of each optional service would probably make the text clearer (e.g., Mutual Authentication: in
addition...)

The word "Section" should be capitalized when referring to a specific section (e.g., in Section 8).

The ID nits tool makes a few observations about boilerplates. The authors should make sure that the boilerplates in the draft are OK.

http://tools.ietf.org/idnits?url=http://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-kitten-rfc2853bis-05.txt

Also, the ID tools complains about 4 instances of lines with non-RFC2606-compliant FQDNs but does not identify them.