Document: draft-ietf-nsis-applicability-mobility-signaling-17

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:

IETF LC End Date: 2010-06-17

IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: This draft where type is Informational is on the right track but 
has open issues, described in the review.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

1.  Section 6 says that topics is this section are out-of-scope of this 
document and detailed operations are not described yet section 6.1.1 provide 
what looks like detailed operations.

2.  I am not sure what is the value in appendix A, it looks to me redundant 
after reading the rest of the document

Nits/editorial comments:

1.  All over the document there are abbreviations that are not specified in 
full or not specified the first time used. Examples are MRI, MN, CN, AR. NR, 
SII, HA, FA, QNE, QSPEC,RSN… I suggest that the editor will go through the 
document and specify all abbreviations.

2.  In section 4.2 and 4.3 in the beginning instead of the following figure 
suggest to write Figure 1 or Figure 2. I also think that the flow description 
should be enumerated using the numbers from figure 1.

3.  In section 4.2 "the MN must get to know" maybe say "The MN need to acquire"

4.  In section 5.3.1 "The second one is otherwise, and here the tunneling 
path is transparent as a logical link to NSIS signaling 
[draft-ietf-nsis-tunnel].". I am not sure what is meant by “the second one 
is otherwise”.

5.       In section 6.1.1 there is a figure without a number. There are 
figure 8 and 9 and in the middle this one with no number.

6.       In section 4.4.2 in the sentence "(how this is can be noticed is 
out of scope of NSIS, yet, e.g., GIST will eventually no this through 
undelivered messages)" should be "know" and not "no".