Document: draft-ietf-pim-rpf-vector-07 Reviewer: Ben Campbell Review Date: 2009-01-13 IETF LC End Date: 2009-01-19 IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: This draft is very close to ready for publication as a proposed standard. There is a minor issue that should be addressed prior to publication, and a couple of editorial nits. Note 1: The Gen-ART assignment was for version 06, but version 07 has been published. This review is for 07. Note 2: I previously reviewed 06 for publication as an informational RFC. This review is incremental to that one. I consider any comment from that review not mentioned here to be resolved. Major issues: None Minor issues: The following issue from my previous review has not been addressed. Email with an author indicated that they intended to fix this, but it doesn't appear to have made it into the draft. > -- IDNITS reports that there is no RFC 2119 reference or boilerplate, > but there is at least one use of normative language (2.3.4). Furthermore, Section 2 is liberally sprinkled with occurrences of lower-case "must", "should" and "may" that should be examined to determine if they warrant normative language. I did not consider this an issue for an informational RFC, but do consider it to so for a proposed standard. Nits/editorial comments: -- IANA Considerations, last sentence (new comment) s/propose/proposed The following editorial comments from my previous review has not been addressed. Email with an author indicated that they intended to fix most of these, but the fixes don't appear to have made it into the draft. > -- There are a number of acronyms that should be expanded on first > use. I would not worry about expanding acronyms that are well known to > the entire IETF community (e.g. TCP), but acronyms that are not widely > known outside the BGP community probably should be. > > -- Section 2, first sentence: > > Who is the "we" in this context? A edge router? (This is not a > complaint about 2nd person language in general so much as a concern > about the actor being obscured.) The pattern of saying "we" or "our" > referring to a network element taking some particular action occurs a > few more times in the document. It would be better to simply name the > element. > > -- Section 2.3.4, first paragraph: > > s/depending/dependent