Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-lf-conv-frmwk-06
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 06 Oct 2009
IESG Telechat date: 08 Oct 2009

Summary: This document is ready for publication as an informational RFC. I have a few remaining nits that may be worth addressing if there is a new revision, or possibly in auth 48--but none are worth blocking publication.

Note: I reviewed revision 5 at last call. This review is incremental to that one. Most of my comments are addressed in revision 6.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

-- A few nits from my previous review resulted in no change. I don't know if these were intentional choices (which is okay), or oversights, So I will paste them below, along with any additional comments where
relevant:


>> -- [Section 2] 2nd to last paragraph: "congestion loss"
>>
>> Did you mean "congestion" or "packet loss"?
>

No change. To amplify, you use the term "congestion loss", which I read to mean "a reduction in congestion", i.e. a good thing. I don't think that's what you meant. Do you mean something like "packet loss due to congestion"?

> -- section 5.1, second to last paragraph:
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> Is there a reference for the simulations?

No change. It would be nice to have some evidence (a reference, or a sentence of two describing the simulations )  to back up assertions like "simulations indicate". Otherwise they come off as weasel-words [ http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Weasel_words
  ]

>
> -- 6.1, first paragraph:
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> s/"can be proved"/"can be proven"
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> Also, is there a reference for such a proof?

No change. See previous comment re: weasel words.


-- idnits returns the following:

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>   == The document seems to lack a disclaimer for pre-RFC5378 work, but 
> was
>      first submitted before 10 November 2008.  Should you add the 
> disclaimer?
>      (See the Legal Provisions document at
>      http://trustee.ietf.org/license-info for more information.).
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>   Checking references for intended status: Informational
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>   == Outdated reference: A later version (-12) exists of
>      draft-ietf-rtgwg-ipfrr-framework-11
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